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Originally Posted by julix

A road
A special night
Filled with wonder
And delight
My children’s eyes sparkling
A vison of a memory
A thought strikes me
Sudden pain
Again the grief
Washes over the hole
In my heart
The hole that has never healed
Surrounded by family
And feeling the pain
But not being able to acknowledge it
It gets pushed down…
Down deep
Where it remains
Until I am alone in the dark
Shaking
Crying
In fear
Just like the little girl
Who used to cry herself to sleep.

I hear you loud and clear.

Quote:

Originally Posted by julix

I have written some poems and wanted to get feedback from you all.....Let me know what you think

1)
As I sit alone
the house so quite
and calm
I wonder
who am I?
What do I need to do?
so many years of pretending
now it comes to this
one moment of truth
where I step in the spotlight
and see what I am made of

2)
Happiness an elusive dream
floating through my fingers
so often slipping away
like a whim
sometimes I try to chase it
or squeeze it to get it to stay
sometimes I hold on too tight
or shy away
sometimes I don't even try
at all, but then there is
no hope...and I am not ready to
live a life without hope
So I continue to dream

3)
I was outside; it was snowing
I was alone and it was so cold
So long ago it seemed.
The snow fell freely around me
The flakes were so beautiful and unique
So light and innocent, without a doubt.
How gently they floated down to the earth.
I reached out and tried to hold the memories
But like the snow flakes the memories melted away.

So what do you think?I had one of these published in the school newspaper
when I was fifteen.

I can relate to the first poem. Great job, Julix.

Hey Captmiloman

Thanks for the feedback, I honestly didn't see it untill today :)

I love them sis!
#1 is my fave :)

:thumbsup:

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Originally Posted by amberstar

I love them sis!
#1 is my fave :)

:thumbsup:

((((((((((((((((hugs))))))))))))))))) miss ya Sis...... :)

The pain hits me once more
unexpected and unwelcome
waves crashing over my body
again and again
pain and fear
trembling together
shaking
thoughts and emotions
I can't stop
or understand
my head and heart
breaking
suffering
suffering
no end to it
untill
I make myself stop
I put it away
in a box inside myself
where there is no key
to lock it up
where it unleashes
when it wants to
where it wants to

there is neither
time nor space where
grief ends
it continues to
be a part
of me
welcome or not
it has become
what it will
perhaps
a space to
coexist

Re: Julix's corner

my daughter who is 10 just wrote this poem for me....

I see her
Whenever we bring it up,
Darkness fills the room
I dread every moment
we get
When the two halves
Of the heart
Were together,
Heaven
When two
Halves of the
Heart break
Nothing is in
Balance
My Grandfather
And Mom

this emoticon is from her!!!!!;):thumbsup:

Re: Julix's corner

this is a poem written by my 10 year old daughter

I see her
Whenever we bring it up,
Darkness fills the room
I dread every moment
we get
When the two halves
Of the heart
Were together,
Heaven
When two
Halves of the
Heart break
Nothing is in
Balance
My Grandfather
And Mom

this emoticon is from her;):thumbsup:

Re: Julix's corner

Quote:

Originally Posted by julix (Post 243361)

So well done, grasping the essence there, all right.

Re: Julix's corner

Quote:

Originally Posted by Limerickcot (Post 294796)

So well done, grasping the essence there, all right.

thank you, I really appreciate that!