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Old October 3rd, 2005, 10:48 PM   #15
Eric Paddon
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Here's one change I wanted to make. In the raid by Starbuck and Boomer where they set charges to the command center, Apollo and the rest run into them and he asks, "Did you find the command center?" Starbuck says yes, Apollo asks where, and Starbuck points back and shouts, "THERE!" and then the command center explodes.

It would have been better I think if you'd had the explosion after Apollo asks the question, and then Starbuck could just grin sheepishly and point back, "There." with a chuckle. Would have made for a great Starbuck moment!
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