Re: The Final Duty
Gone through it. I'll be interested in seeing what you can do with this in a script or story format. A couple suggestions I'd make:
1-Establish what happened to the main characters from the series. Other than "Sire Box" who is the grown Boxey I think some of these next generation characters should have a connection to characters like Boomer, Athena, Starbuck, Cassie etc. I noticed only late a reference to Sheba. It's easier to embrace "next generation" characters in a story if there's some general establishment of what happened to the old gang without getting too bogged down.
2-I was a little confused with "ending 3" which mentions "Ovions break away from Cylons to pursue humanity themselves. " The Ovions would be an extinct race now in light of the fact that Carillon blew up.
Keep writing and share with us what you develop further!
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