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Old January 26th, 2005, 02:03 PM   #53
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Originally Posted by julix
Here is another poem...I am not real happy with this one...but any feedback is appreciated


A long journey
It seems
Hard and vast
Treacherous
So many obstacles
Which only taunt me
As I feel
I will never find
The end, my goal
So far away
Unattainable
It seems
As I continue to climb
I feel doubt and fear
Confusion
Can I make it?
I stumble and fall
Yet again like
so many times before
do I dare get up again?
And if I do where
Do I turn?
The path is not clear
There is no map
No compass
No help
I am alone in my quest

I like this .. its where I am at this moment in time... have some decissions to make and soon..? the thing about been alone is ..you are..even in a crowded room your thoughts and concerns flooding your mind... without rest.. relentless thought beating there way into your mind..and your traped behind the shell of your mind..

just my thoughts on your poem...and where it fits in with me at this time..

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